Thank god for this opening, as I was extremely worried about Vorn at the end of chapter 1, and with that, I could rest a little easier.
I really like Vorn's vision of the wall and his elders falling. When chapter 1 mentioned that as long as they got all the mortals behind the wall, everyone would be safe... I immediately started to worry about it falling.
And I can't believe his parents just turned away from him. I know it was a vision, and possibly just Tarneb's poison playing with his mind, but it creates a huge amount of tension and worry.
I thoroughly enjoyed this and am already looking forward to the next chapters.
Just a little side note to say that I think I might be a bit in love with Zera (I can feel a major girl-crush coming on) and the world you have built for them is just stunning! I absolutely loved that whole paragraph of description - the tree, I found a particular stand-out. I love a world I can properly visualise, especially when it is full of people I can really care about!
Than you for your kind words. I truely appreciate your time and attention. Yeah Zera's quite fun to write, I like the dynamic between her and Vorn. Thanks for reading!
Great descriptions! I can see it!
Thank god for this opening, as I was extremely worried about Vorn at the end of chapter 1, and with that, I could rest a little easier.
I really like Vorn's vision of the wall and his elders falling. When chapter 1 mentioned that as long as they got all the mortals behind the wall, everyone would be safe... I immediately started to worry about it falling.
And I can't believe his parents just turned away from him. I know it was a vision, and possibly just Tarneb's poison playing with his mind, but it creates a huge amount of tension and worry.
I thoroughly enjoyed this and am already looking forward to the next chapters.
Just a little side note to say that I think I might be a bit in love with Zera (I can feel a major girl-crush coming on) and the world you have built for them is just stunning! I absolutely loved that whole paragraph of description - the tree, I found a particular stand-out. I love a world I can properly visualise, especially when it is full of people I can really care about!
Than you for your kind words. I truely appreciate your time and attention. Yeah Zera's quite fun to write, I like the dynamic between her and Vorn. Thanks for reading!
I really liked the way the last sentence tied the vision to reality and offered up the prospect of an interesting meeting between Vorn and Thoh.
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Thank you Reginald. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
How's the next chapter of your story going?
I'm a fan of your work!
I'm enjoying the process of writing this story, it's really fun.